Story is in a protected PDF Form.

https://docs.google.com/open?id=0B6zopHAZ4JvbOTY3Y2QyN2UtYmM1NC00OTBlLWI5NjYtYjcwNDc0YTE3NzNh (Corrected Version)

https://docs.google.com/open?id=0B6zopHAZ4JvbZmI3NDYwODYtMzliZC00NjkxLTg5ZGEtMDI0OTlkNzFlZDcz (Corrected Version)

https://docs.google.com/open?id=0B6zopHAZ4JvbYmYxNTZiM2YtOWI2Zi00ZTk0LWJkMDMtYjIxNjlhNTEyYzkz (Corrected Version)


Part Four now Ready!

https://docs.google.com/open?id=0B6zopHAZ4JvbYzY5YTgwM2QtMzJiNS00MDVhLWIxODAtYTE3MDk3OTQ1NjM0

Also Part five now ready!

https://docs.google.com/open?id=0B6zopHAZ4JvbYTE3MDc0N2YtYTQwZS00ODZmLWI1MDItMDJlZjdlZGJhMjgz

And the final part completed as well!

https://docs.google.com/open?id=0B6zopHAZ4JvbMTJiOTg2MGEtOGY1MS00OTI2LTllZGItYWJlYzBhN2EzODFk

I liked it, waiting for more. Couldnt find any mistakes, and was well written. Good job.

Very nicely done. It was a great read.

More parts are on the way soon. Her story in game is done (unless Bethesdas does somethign with Forsworn in a DLC), so just got to write it all down now.

Errrrh. Stopped reading when you misused 'to' in the third sentence. AND there's a typo on Bruma. You clearly have some writing ability; give it the respect it deserves and clean this stuff up before you post it.

Part 2 Ready now, thanks for all the feedback so far, both good and bad!

(Link to Part 2 moved to First Post)



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In gentle retrospect to dinmenel, before you stop reading something because of spelling errors and grammar, and calling that a lack of respect, you might want to consider that some people have a disability called Dyslexia. I personally have all three subtypes of it and you liekly have no idea just how bloody difficult writting accurately is for people like us.

Nor how hurtfull it is to us when people judge works on spelling and grammar alone (and use tearms like lack of respect or lack of education, etc...), instead of judging by content which is what really matters in the end.

I do appreaciate even negative feedback, including yours. I was updating part 1 even as you were posting probably, and I totaly would of missed the Bruma error. My brain just can't see mixed up letters like that, unfortunately.

You might want to consider in the future that 5-10% of the population has the same problem I do before impying a lack of respect. I'm just one of the few that is silly enough to still want to write and share stories publiclly.

Most people with my disability give up on reading and writing by the time they are in the 6th grade, because of the lack of understanding with the disability infecting a good percentage of the population.

Actually, I know quite well what dyslexia is. I assume you've gone through some kind of assistance program like Alphabetic Phonics, though, 'cause you write way too well to not have done. But, look - if you know you're not going to catch simple things like that yourself, have someone else check it first. Content is more important, yes, but the fact is that good content can not be fully appreciated with the presence of simple spelling or technical mistakes. And if you respect your work, you want it to be fully appreciated; i.e., professional.

I'm here to bring things to your attention. It's up to you to fix them. So you have an issue; so what? You clearly haven't let it stop you from writing, which is admirable and amazing, so don't let it stop you from writing professionally; there's no reason why it should. You know the problem - so take the necessary steps to overcome it.

dinmenel

Once I get This story to the point of a single merged PDF it should hopefully be much improved and freer of my dyslectic moments, and it might be a better read for you by then.

To answer your question on Alphabetic Phonics, it's a no. My condition wasn't identified until my Junior year in HS in 82 when I took a military ASVAB and that test identified the issue. And how bad it actually was.

By then it was too late for that sort of remedial training. Even now Dyslexia is still missed in most cases, past the point where it can be corrected at a young age.

I ended up training myself to read, but differently then most, by forcing myself to become a voracious reader, something I did while in the military shortly after HS. College was a no go for me by that point. I tend to read by looking at entire words at a time, or blocks of words, not at the letters or sounds that compose them. I probably read more like oriental people, to me words are symbols with specific meanings. That does have some drawbacks though, if I hit a word I've never seen before, it can take me minutes to puzzle it out. The first time I saw the word 'Defenestrate' used, it almost made me go into fits. In fact I couldn't puzzle the meaning out of the word at all until I looked it up.

Unfortunately, with English, it affects my verbal, listening and writing as well. I did get strait A's in Spanish though. It's one of the reason's I'm all for mandatory second languages in schools, it's one of the best ways to pick up on Dyslexia and get around it. Unfortunately I couldn't stay with Spanish past that 1 semester or I might be writing in that language instead. I'm actually surprised the School system didn't pick up on it then. When a kid gets D's and F's in English and history ( because of spelling, grammar and an inability to pick up small details out of a contextual story) then outright aces Spanish, it's sort of a dead give away that they are dyslexic...

I understand that the common scholastic culture is that perfect writing is most important. However that's basically not a practical expectation of someone with Dyslexia. It's not always available to have people check our work over, especially when it's something like fan fiction, and not works that are going through publishers or peer review processes.

Yes I'm a bit outspoken about this disability as I've actually lost a job over it once, because the person I worked for basically felt that I was 'Uneducated' and 'Unprofessional' and an 'Idiot' because I couldn't spell accurately, and could even mix up words as I was talking. It was an employer that should of known better (State of Te_ _s).

As a dyslectic friend of mine once wrote: "Dyslexic's of the World Untie!"

I'm no expert, but I don't think it's too late, especially considering how well you do already. My sister went through http://www.google.com/url?sa=t&rct=j&q=multisensory%20reading%20and%20spelling&source=web&cd=1&ved=0CCwQFjAA&url=http%3A%2F%2Fwww.neuhaus.org%2Fattachments%2Fcontentmanagers%2F64%2FMRS.pdf&ei=p9IgT9OnKMHq0gHnsPT3CA&usg=AFQjCNHZG8pW-BdKztB3h6IN-xAiFIDP5w&cad=rja when she was, oh, twenty five or so. You trained yourself to read, dude. You can do anything.


Yeah, sorry about that, I know I was brash. I just feel that there's no way to improve except to have someone tell you straight up what needs to be fixed. I guess it's just an issue of cost/benefit, like you say. You strike me as someone who really does care about their work, though, on talking with you, so I'd encourage you not to accept lower standards. Like I said - you taught yourself to read. You clearly have the inventive intellect and willpower to overcome whatever stands in your way.

Also: 'defenestrate'!!!??!? That's the best word I've learned in a long time! You're educating me, man.

Just posted Part 3.

I'm moving the links for each part to the first post in thread.

Part four now posted in first post of the thread.

Hope you all enjoying so far.

Part 5 Now also Posted to first post in thread.

The sixth and final part (for now) of Asavia's Tale is completed, and now in the first post of the thread.

I'll eventualy be merging them all into a single PDF giving them all a final edit in the process.