I just wanted to hear what you thought about this story for a roleplay character I made up! Should I keep working on him and filling out gaps within his story or just abandon him?
Please respond!

Cylben Llenim
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Cylben Llenim was born in Morrowind, in Blacklight in 4E 05, on the
brink of the Red Year. He was at an early age, in 4E 06 taken to
Solstheim to survive the Red Year. He enrolled with the Legion, but
after being impaled with a sword, he quit at the rank of Praefect.
Cylben is terrified of undead. Terrified. He's very arrogant, with
a harsh attitude, only being nice to those who have done something
to him, or to someone who also is a dark elf.
Perhaps this was because of his experiences of the Red Year, or the
death of his father, during the shipwreck that brought him to Skyrim.
He sailed on the Skinny Horker, together with his father, the crew-
members, and the captain, Tobias Chillcoat. They were heading for
Dawnstar, to mostly provide assistance to the Imperial Legion, which
they did by free will. Tobias sailed into an
iceberg, killing of the crew in mere seconds, while a rough wind
turned the ship over. Cylben was the only survivor, grieving over the
death of his father. He walked for 1,5 weeks, before reaching Morthal,
swimming in the icecold water, killing slaughterfish on the way, and
meeting horkers for the first time. He reached Morthal the 4th of
First Seed. He was at that time, 106 years old. However, elves live
for about 400 years minimum, so he was very young at the time of his
arrival. He was at that time almost frozen to death, wearing barely
nothing to withstand the cold wind.