Yeah, I had to write a poem for English, and my teacher thought it was very good, along with my class mates.Do you think it's any good?


Love is nothing but a meaningless shadow.
Love deceives more then a chameleons skin…
Thy beauty is found more in death’s cold embrace.
Thy pond is deeper then love’s depth.
Thy Banshee’s shrieks our more of a lullaby then loves deceiving voice.
Love is more of an illusion then thy deserts mirage.
Thy crimson blade cuts less and hurts little compared to loves sting.
Loves lust is greater then that of a king, for thy power and thou pleasur
Love corrupts and perverts more then thou Satan
Love is like a black rose, dark, painful to hold, and thou withers away slowly and agonizing.

While I'm not too interested in poetry I've spend a fair bit of time anolyzing it (damn critical evaluations ) and I like your use of imagery and structure - mainly the repetition.

Though, some minor things I noticed:


Suppose to say "than"? Or am I missing something? (I noticed you also did it later on, which makes me think this might be some poetry magic)


Isn't that a comma splice? This is what gets me with poetry, the standard rules of language don't apply

The comma was mistake, and to be actually honest with you, I don't know why I put "then" instead of "than"

I love how true it is


Love was invented by the government to make humanity breed faster (jk)


Very good poem