Hello Everybody !

So I was working on a good original character the past few days , here's what I made.
Any type of feedback is welcome

-------------------Character Sheet------------------------
Name: Erinette
Last Name: Firefield
Race: Breton
Gender: Female
Age: 21
Appearance: Red hair , blue eyes , medium weight , she has similarities from her Breton side and from her Nord side.
Class: Knight
Birth Place: Jehanna , High Rock
Birth Day: 18 of Hearthfire
Religion: At the beginning she doesn't care about religion , but later might worship Dibella.

Class details:

Her father always encouraged her to trust material over magic.
Mostly she was training with the bow , in a later stage of her training she began using the swords too.
Her mastery of the sword isn't perfect and she must learn many things to use it properly.

She knows the basic magic spells from her mother but never actually uses them ( that may change ).
Erinette can use both Heavy and Light armors.

When it comes to Heavy armor she prefers it to be more full , she'd like Plate Steel more than regular steel or Steel with shoulders instead of the regular variation.
She won't use armors such as Iron or anything she considers 'Dull'.

However she will wear any type of Light armor.

Arrival to Skyrim details:

Her father suggests her to go to Skyrim in order to have more training and use her skills in battle in real combat.
Her path set through the mountains of Hammerfell , then to the Jerall mountains and after that into Skyrim.

She wants to become a better Knight there , she will also want to settle in the Reach as it's the closest place to her home and resembles it.

However as she will live in Skyrim her motives and aims can change..

Character Notes:

• She was warned about the Forsworn problem in the Reach , she thinks of it as another great training opportunity , however her view on the Forsworn might change in the end.
  
• Her mother's fate in Skyrim doesn't interest her ( her mother died in Skyrim , she trained her magic there )
  
• She will become confused by which side to take , the Forsworn or the local Nords , as her father is a Nord and a great person who she loves.
  
• She's missing her country and city greatly , only the Reach is what makes her happy.
  
• She fears closed places and being trapped because she was once captured by bandits who she was sent after by the court of the city.
  
• She looks for civilization and peace , however it isn't what goes in Skyrim.
  
• Her mother comes from a lineage of pure-blooded Bretons , she isn't one.

• Long time ago , shortly after the Oblivion Crisis , there was a big feud within her family , one of the sons began practicing Necromancy.
  He escaped the family and founded a fort as his base , Ft.Firefield in High Rock.
  This place is feared by the local folk and the undead are threatening the people even outside of the fort.
  Rumors say that the son became a Lich , this story is well known in their family.
  
  This might affect Erinette's life as she's the last daughter to the family and she fears the Lich will eventually try to find her.

Well that's it , it took me a lot of time and I must say I really love it

Let me know what you think of it !

I like where this is going
I can see her taking sides with the forsworn.
The forsworn are in the neighboring province of High Rock known as the witch men, and since your character is from High Rock you might find some legitimate reason as of why she would side with them. You can for example make her discover the truth about her mother having connections with these witches, just as a suggestion.
here is a cool article i want to share with you: http://elderlore.wordpress.com/2012/07/28/the-witchmen-of-high-rock/

*Cough* Next rp *Cough*

Its good to see you finally got a good rp character going.

we are even going to High Rock and all

Thanks for the nice comments
Sadly the character doesn't go well with the Wolfpack thread..

...That svcks...

well, less fan mail for him, more for us

There's only one problem I come across.
How in Oblivion I am supposed to deal with the Forsworn attacks when I helped Madanch , I wear their armor and might even agree that the Reach is theirs ?

Well, you are half nord. Maybe you can RP that you're always going to be considered a pariah no matter what you do?

I thought they stopped attacking after the The Forsworn Conspiracy

Lol, so true. Well...more for Phenix

iZsoul, hopefully you either change your mind or make a new character and rejoin us. We have fans now and you're missing out.


No they still try to kill you. Its just that one pocket of Forsworn in the cave that don't try to murder you.

Woah that's a brilliant idea actually!
The Forsworn take her as not a pure Breton , and so they don't have any sympathy with her

Thanks, I worked on that RP angle for a whopping 20-25 seconds.

Ahh that only points at my limited brain usage..

I don't even think I thought about it when I wrote it. Its like I channel dead writers or something.

You make me look worse and worse.. XD

Well, I plan on writing a little Skyrim fanfiction in order to get my writing skills back up because the world I created for a fiction I'm working on (kind of like Dawn of the Dead mixed with D&D) is still stuck in its first chapter. I just keep rewriting and rewriting it lol.

Well , good luck !
Also I must say , always when I go to write my RP story on the forums , it's better than the paper version , I guess the internet improves your skills ?

I think my problem is that I overthink what I'm writing. I should probably just write the whole damn thing, then go back, reread and edit, rather then trying to be perfect on the first try.

More than likely. When I wrote Ra'Khacharr's background I wasn't thinking I was just typing. It turned out good, then I went back and edited a few things now its pretty decent. So just let your pen do the writing then correct it later

I hope you are going to update us on your character, you could try and write some fan fic involving her as well, since your not part of a role play then I’m guessing that’s the best way

That's what we call freestyle, like what we are doing in our role play, just sitting down and writing without planning ahead

If she turns out to be a nice character who wasn't a waste of paper and hours , most likely I'll do.
But now it's the time to actually play her

Also , I'll add screenshots of her. ( That's the part I miss the most. )