Jam the Pyro Tape 1

Post » Wed Aug 12, 2009 9:12 am

While I was searching for food out in the Capital Wasteland, I found this old school... I could not quite make out what the sign said, but it looked like Springvale. There were alot of dead raiders. That didn't come as a surprise, but what did was this thing I found. I heard someone call it a "Flamer". My dad always told me if I ever touched the trigger of a gun, all hell would break loose. Boy, was he right. I went to this town nearby the school. This robot thing called it Megaton. More like "MegaNONE" now. I think you get the idea. *End of tape*
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Chloe Botham
 
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Post » Wed Aug 12, 2009 6:11 am

MegaNONE? Yay for terrible puns!

Seriously though, it's way too short. Since it's supposed to be a recording, I suppose that's understandable though.
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Post » Wed Aug 12, 2009 9:39 am

nice idea but it need's more length.6 out of 10.
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Post » Wed Aug 12, 2009 2:55 pm

Good, but shoulda' been a liiiiittle longer, even for an intro, but this is good. Nice punctuation, and that crappy joke at the end made me lol I give it a 73/100 for the length
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