Good LuckWhenever I try to write a fantasy novel I plan elaborate races, geography, maps and cultures, and then the story ends up reading like a Encyclopedia Brittanica article.

Of course, if you want to go with dwarves, why not make them into mountain dwellers? It's similiar to the underground, but instead they carve cities and stuff on the faces of mountains and create caves.

You should innovate, introduce a new idea of fantasy. People see fantasy as unreal world, with magic, and fairies and viking warriors and things. Like, Runescape...or in this case, the Elder Scrolls.The last time I wrote a fantasy, it was real world fantasy. Something that can actually be achieved, it was fantasy that people would look forward TO instead of old world fantasy that people would just reminisce about. Vikings and other things are old and gone forever. Write about the future, something we can achieve but hasn't happened yet. So many things seem like they can never happen, holograms, flying cars, time travel, etc. But technologies pace is so fast, that it can happen before we know it.Here's my example.My fantasy was in the future. Cars hovered just above the ground through a technology called 'emanation'. Seat belts were no longer polyester they were 'Holoprotect' brand seat belts. Just blue rays of light that crossed your chest for safety, and created a bubble of protection in case of a crash. Sidewalks moved, elevators soared over 200 floors, teleportation, etc. It's all unrealistic things of the future. But it didn't take place in the future, it took place anywhere I wanted it to. It wasn't going to be a story of haywire technology, or robots ruling the Earth. It took a completely different turn, entering the realm of dreams. 5 people are subject to a 'dreamial study' as it's called in the future where they will have an interlinking dream, where they eventually become trapped inside their own minds. All of their fears, dreams and nightmares come to life around them. It wasn't based on vikings and witchcraft, it was based off of things we experience today and will continue to experience in the future. Dreams.That was my sort of innovation, but it's just an example. Innovate. Don't stick to old common topics like magic and witchcraft. Take fantasy to a new level that people haven't heard of. That's my advice for you. But you're already far in the creation of this story, so this will be relatively useless, but can be used for further reference.

I completely understand.



Who knows, I haven't been able to get a lot of feedback, so I'm not positive what to think.




I was actually just thinking about dreams when I read this.

I absolutely love the idea of the stereotypical fantasy. It's just fun for me. I do also like your points. Are there any things you can thing of that can be implemented that would both fit the setting and be something unique to this writing? Also, to get some feedback, is there anything (such as posted above) that has already been implemented?

I'll get back to you on the topic of innovative ideas for this current writing.But as for the underlined section, yes, actually some of my ideas in the writing have already come to life. In the story, the mention of 'Emanation Technology' which is the emanation of a light that suspends the vehicle a few feet from the ground, for efficiency, there have been some breakthroughs in the technology. The 'hover bike' ( http://www.hover-bike.com/ ) uses a type of fan to propel the vehicle a few feet from the ground, similar to my idea for emanation technology. The reason I use the word 'emanate' is because the power literally emanates from the vehicle itself, just as the hover bike.Elevators, don't really soar as high, mainly because buildings haven't yet gotten to be over 200 floors just yet.As for interactive hologram technology, we're a bit far from that. And even when we reach it, I doubt it will be used for safety. In my story, 'Holoprotect Seat belts' are solid holographic projections, like real seat belts. They're virtually indestructible, for safety and project a solid holographic 'bubble' of protective shield over the wearer. I doubt we'd ever reach that... but still, it's pretty cool. In the story there are also mentions of a technology called 'Lucid' which would be a gaming console. Kind of like an Xbox or PS3. The Lucid Game Console would be a device you attach just before sleeping, so you can literally play video games while you sleep. You're completely aware of the game, as if you were awake but don't wake up fatigued or tired, because you still got your 8 hours of sleep. Just imagine, 8 hours of gaming AND sleep. Gaming would become a wide spread phenomenon.

A neutral character/race was mentioned, how about some shamanistic tribal-ish kind of race/character, nomads that believe in balance in everything.If you give them kind of a native american feel/touch with a little bit of sami inspiration.And I think they should ride giant guinea pigs, it's entirely new and guinea pigs walk funny.

A neutral character/race was mentioned, how about some shamanistic tribal-ish kind of race/character, nomads that believe in balance in everything.
If you give them kind of a native american feel/touch with a little bit of sami inspiration.

And I think they should ride giant guinea pigs, it's entirely new and guinea pigs walk funny.

I lol'd at the guinea pigs. It's just so silly, yet would be so badass.

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I know, right.